LJ Idol LPF Week 3

[encrefloue]

Topic: "Tsundoku"

Note: The first stanza is to be read horizontally, left to right. The second stanza is to be read vertically, right to left. If you're not keen on this, I've posted the poem as plain text in the first comment on this post.

t	s	u	n	d	o	k	u
It	sp	un	an	d t	oo	k o	ut
the	shr	oud,	sen	din	g ro	ck d	ust
into	fres	h wou	nds a	nd a h	omes	ick m	outh.
After	it sur	round	ed any	dolef	ul, onl	ookin	g curs,
it sate	d itsel	f with u	nlatch	ing nod	es from	unkemp	t tufts
of palm t	rees and	jumbled	nori, dis	carding	them alo	ng Tohok	u's coast.

t	s	U	N	D	O	k	U
at	o s	nu	in	id	ol	ak	nu
too	ets	sua	e en	Edo	ong	is, k	su a
ed to	a squ	l tum	ds ne	endu	pour	oi, ki	l rup
tacit	all as	ults, t	ver kn	re as d	ed ont	cking	tures
mouths:	animus	umesce	own by a	ire a dr	o Obasa	askew a	surged,
tsunami.	asunder,	nt furor—	kitsune.	eam's end?	n's books.	katsura.	hurling

Comments

[encrefloue]

tsundoku
It spun and took out
the shroud, sending rock dust
into fresh wounds and a homesick mouth.
After it surrounded any doleful, onlooking curs,
it sated itself with unlatching nodes from unkempt tufts
of palm trees and jumbled nori, discarding them along Tohoku's coast.

Unusual ruptures surged, hurling
kakis, koi, kicking askew a katsura.
Oolong poured onto Obasan's books.
Did Edo endure as dire a dream's end?
Nine ends never known by a kitsune.
Unusual tumults, tumescent furor—
so sets a squall as animus asunder,
tattooed to tacit mouths: tsunami.

[bleodswean]

This is sheer and absolute word ART. The time is evident and the cryptic message a kind of universal dream image. SO NICE!

[alycewilson]

I love how you've stacked the sounds here! Very creative and well done.